This is like the first chapter. If you read it in a bookstore would you buy it? Tell me what you like and dislike…tell me you opinion…and if anyone wants to help me edit please email me at garcia_ana2793@yahoo.com i would really appreciate it! By the way i know that there might be some grammar and a lot of other mistakes in my writing sorry grammar and punctation isn’t my best thing… =D
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here it is:

“Hi, Brit what did you need me for?”

I asked Brigette as I stepped into the living room. She sat very still in the couch her sky blue eyes filled with tears.

She looked at me apologetically. She still was in her pajamas at seven p.m. kind of odd for her to be like that. Her chocolate hair was up on a ponytail. She hadn’t gone out the whole day. She kept her eyes fixated on me. The silence that filled the room grew uncomfortable.

“Is everything okay? You feel okay?” I asked.

She patted the seat next to her in the couch, signaling me to go sit next to her. I did as she wanted and went to sit next to her. I loved her with all my heart and something told me she wasn’t alright. I put her head between my hands forcing her to meet my eyes..

“Baby what’s wrong?” I asked once again.

She broke out in tears I pulled her into my chest. Seconds later she pulled herself together. And finally spoke.

“Aron?” She said trying to not meet my concern eyes.

“Aron…I don’t want to hurt you but—“

She paused and got up from the sofa. Something told me that she didn’t want to tell me something good.

She sighed.

“Aron— I don’t love you. I think it would be best if you and I went out separate ways.”

She turned around to face me. Her eyes filled with anger and something else anger.

“I don’t” she paused. “I…I don’t love you as much I much did.”

Her words burnt a hole in my chest. She did she didn’t want to hurt me but she still did so.

“No! Why are you joking around like this?” I asked her.

Immediately my heart and mind went into denial to what she had just told me.

No she can’t stop loving me.. She promised me she would always love me no matter what. What happened to that promised? I told myself.

I began to shake my head.. My heart stopped for a second.

“Please don’t do this to me. We can work it out.”

I said as if any compromise could be possible.

She bursted out into tears pleading for my forgiveness. My heart was in denial this just couldn’t be true. This was a nightmare that should soon end. I shut my eyes to try to weak up. I opened them and there I still was in her living room. Brigette was the woman of my dreams, my soul mate… the one person I’d do anything for.

She pleaded me to forgive her.

But why? She didn’t do anything wrong. Her heart betrayed her. It was something she couldn’t control. But as much as I told myself that she had no control over her feelings towards me that it as all her heart, I could still feel the pain more alive than ever. Her heart no longer longing for me hurt unlike ant other pain I have ever experience. It was the pain of love.

“But—”

I hurried to find the right words. But none came to mind. This pain was to strong for me to bear with. My heart entered into a battle with my mind.

My heart kept telling my mind

“No. It’s not true nothing she is saying is true.”

“But her words were so profound. They just couldn’t be fake” my mind responded.

Her wide sky blue eyes looked at me filled with tears and once again pleaded for forgiveness. I entered into a state of shock. I had found my one true love and now to find out that I wasn’t her true love. She looked at me with tears coming out one after another. I looked down to the floor. She walked towards me. She reached up and now held my face between her smooth soft hands making me, no forcing me to look her in the eyes. Silence filled the room, only our fast breathing could be heard.

I couldn’t speak.

“Will you please say something?! Say something—-Anything!”

She said with tears coming out again.

She breathed in.

“Tell me you hate me! Just speak…please”

But why does she want my lips to move with words of regret.

I looked into her eyes there was no doubt she felt atrocious for hurting me life this. She very well knew that she had become that reason of my existence. I tried to pull away from her hands, but she held my face there with all her strength.

“Aron speak please!” she spoke again.

Her voice with fear.

I didn’t know what to say. What could I say? Don’t worry I understand you…No! I didn’t understand her.

I sighed, and decided to speak to her.

“What is there to say? What do I say?”

Alleviation came to her at the listen of my voice.

She shrugged at my question..

She wanted to her that I would accept this with the passing of time. I couldn’t lie to her…I couldn’t lie to myself. My heart ached greatly a pain I had never known until now. I didn’t know what to say I could only concentrate on the pain that was inside me. She dropped her hands to her side and walked to the window.

“Brigette?” I called for her.

“Yes, Aron?” her eyes still looking out the window.

“What do you want me to say?” I breathed in. “You want me to tell you not to worry that eventually I’ll get over it?” I asked.

“Yes…” she whispered softly.

I didn’t know what to tell her now. That was what she wanted to hear from me…a lie. She turned around but never looked at me.

“Aron. I’m sorry. I’m sorry for causing you this pain. I’m sorry for the pain I have put over you. But you—”

She hesitated.

I wanted to run into her arms. But something inside me prevented me from doing so. Besides the pain I felt something else hate and resentment…

“I what” I asked.

Her tears quickly became sobs.

“I—I…care about you.” She got the words out with a lot of effort.

She took a deep breath and went on.

"You mean so much to me. You where there twenty-four seven when my parents died.You’ve been with me since the tenth grade helping me get through it. It isn’t fair for me to just come and break a noble, gentle, loving heart like yours."

She closed her eyes shut so she couldn’t see the pain in me.

"I care about you a lot but it isn’t the same way as it used to be when we were fifteen."

Tears came out of her eyes.

I tried hard to grasp each and every single word she spoke. I tried to understand where in the three years since we were fifteen something changed.

I walked to the window. A storm was coming on its way. Lightning filled the room and thunder ended the silence in the room.

"All that you did for me changed the way I looked at you but I didn’t want to see it. But it was all so hazy that I couldn’t understand what my feelings were for you. Soon you changed into a brother figure to me…family"

She smiled at the thought of family.

Then again the room was filled with silence. I tried my best to not concentrate on the pain that she had just put over me.I decided to speak.

"Brigette I think it’s time for me to go—

"Ans i will never regret helping you through the tough times but I do wish you had told me when the way you looked at me changed. So I wouldn’t have made plans of you and I together."

I fought hard to restrain my tears, she quickly turned around to face me.

"Aron don’t go please! I don’t want us to end like this. This isn’t how I wanted it to be. And you can’t go your cars at the mechanics and it will soon rain."

She said.

Like that would stop me from trying to leave. She looked for any excuse so that we could end the right way to talk it out, but I could no longer bear to look at the woman I loved and still love with all my heart and know she doesn’t love me back the way I thought she did.

"All has been said, That’s the least of the problems. It’s best if I go."

I walked to the door where so many times I had come in. It hurt to know that this was the last time I would walk through it. She fallowed behind me crying her eyes out. She put her hands over her heart shaped face to conceal the scream that she wished to let out.

I hesitated on the door and looked at her for a minute.

"Goodbye my love." I said and that would be the last thing I would ever say to her I thought.

As I began to distance myself from her home I began to agree with her I didn’t want it to end like this in fact I didn’t want it to end ever. But fate had decided differently. I soon felt alone she was the girl I had been waiting for only to find out I wasn’t the guy she awaited for. I remembered her kisses. Her soft and sweet lips. Tears came to my eyes at the thought that she no longer loved me. I walked and walked without a destination not that I even cared where I went. I thought this was a nightmare that soon I would have to weak up from. But it was reality, and reality hit hard.

My heart ached I had never experienced this pain.I was only eighteen yet I knew that Brigette was the girl I wanted to spend the rest of my life with. The thunder grew louder and lightning became more consistent. I walked to the woods not caring at all what time it was, I don’t think I even remember my own home. The anguish was bigger than what i wold have ever imagined. As much as I tried to prohibit my heart from building anger it still did so.

Rain drops began to fall from above. I walked in the woods not caring if I got home. I didn’t pay attention to were I was going I just wanted to disappear from the phase of the earth… to never be seen again. The rain became heavier and soon my whole body was soaking wet. Although it was pretty cold outside I didn’t feel it. The pain didn’t let me feel anything else. The pain eased after a while. I became aware of my surroundings. I had walked in the woods for over two hours it was now midnight.

As I walked farther into the woods I felt as if I were being watched. I should have worried but I didn’t. Later I felt followed, quickly I turned around to look behind me but I could not see anyone and it was pitch black only the lighting brighten the path but afterwards leaving me blind.

I turned back around.

I gasped at the surprised to find the most stunning woman standing in front of me. Hey skin was pale but perfect no flaws. Her eyes dark almost black but I wasn’t sure if that was just me. She spoke to me.

"Who are you?"

Her voice was so sweet, astonishing. Unlike any other voice tone I’ve ever heard. She ran her fingers from my ear, to my jaw, to my lips. She traced my lips and finally she put her fingers under my chin and tilted my head back. She kept her fingers there her touch was cold almost as ice. Couple seconds later she dropped her hand back to her side. Something told me this was no average girl. Something told me to make a run from her but another didn’t want to stop looking at her breath taking beauty. Her hazel colored hair didn’t seem to be affected by the rain. She stood silent and still waiting for my answer.

I breathed in her sweet sent.

"I’m Aron, and you?"

It seemed like a silly thing to ask someone this astounding but it was all i could come up with. Her captivating beauty was truly blinding. She looked at me and tilted her head to the left then right. Meanwhile I had the chance to look at the rest of her. Her body was just as perfect as her face. She put any Milan model to shame.

She wore dark colored skinny jeans, with black leather four inch boots that reached her knee. She wore the boots over the jeans. Her top was a black cami. What intrigued me was that she wore a black cape over her. Its length was all the way to the bottom of her heel almost touching the ground. The cape hugged each of her curbs.

"My name is Ella."

She smiled revealing perfectly aligned white teeth.

"Your heart. It’s filled with pain." Said Ella while putting her hand in my chest where my heart is.

"How did you know?" I asked amazed.

"The look in your eyes. the slow beating of your heart."

I smiled and looked at her hand that was placed on my chest.

"Wow! You’re good."

"Aron come with me." she added quickly."I can take all the pain away. Turn you into someone more powerful with abilities unlike anyone else."

I looked at her completely oblivious to what she was saying.

"Okay take the pain away then." I said.

Part of me didn’t believe in a single word she spoke but another knew she could that she was capable of so much more.She smiled at me.

Suddenly she began to lean close to me as if she were going to kiss me. But she began leaning in closer and closer until her lips touched my neck. She kissed me once and leaned back a couple inches.

"Join me in the death of your soul and the birth of a new soul" She said.


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